Is my story good?Any opinions!!!!!!!?

Needs grammatic istance. Needs fleshing out. You described a very tragic event in too few words. If you want your readers to build a relationship with your character, you have to invite them in. Suck them into your character's lack of concern about what her parents might be fighting about, and her sorrow over her father's unusual ping. There's so much more that could have been said. All in all I do feel like it is a potentially interesting premise that needs lots of help.